I like this. I like the colored version a bit better myself. The femme: I'd pose her left hand to where it's supporting the face, fingers out flat, in-between the hair and head. Definately relax her right hand and lay her gams one over the other. Her hair is a good choice. :) The guy: Hard to tell what he's doing. It looks like he's getting ready to grope her. I like his appearance though. As others have mentioned, it would be more effective if the characters were looking at the camera. An easy way to do this is to select each of their eyes and use "Point to" and select the camera you're using in this shot.

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