A story of unintended consequences, eh? Interesting concept. I've always wondered what would happen if some scientist ever succeeded in creating a black hole in the laboratory, and started sucking in the world around him. I found a few typos you might want to fix. Saw the previous story. Nice to see how it all started. Here are a few things I found that you might want to consider changing. Change at major centres to at major centers Likewise, change several other major centres to several other major centers I'd change What little remained of the two countries, were destroyed by the nuclear winter that was to follow. to What little remained of the two countries, was destroyed by the nuclear winter that followed. I'd also change a twinge of doubt. What if they spent all these years... to a twinge of doubt. What if we spent all these years... and like the catacombs that he built for his family. to like the catacombs that he had built for his family. Change Ashraf collapsed in a dishevelled heap to Ashraf collapsed in a disheveled heap Are you doing these as tag lines for the graphics only, or do you intend to develop them into a series of short stories? jon

 
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