Forum: Writers


Subject: A Perfect Eternity

topgunner1024 opened this issue on Feb 02, 2003 ยท 15 posts


Crescent posted Wed, 05 February 2003 at 8:13 PM

I'm rather literal and took this to be a statement on a relationship, but enjoyed it a lot. You pack a lot into 8 lines. In my interpretation, the man is bedazzeled by a woman who cares nothing for him or his interests, whose disinterest turns his world to ash. Everything he held as important she belittled until he lost all the joys he once held.

(No, I'm not literal enough to assume that you were talking about your current relationship, or even a past one.) ;-)

Wrought with blood
Dead to my world

Those lines really brought me into the poem, making me read it a few times to savor how much was said in so few words.

Great job!