I like the first two lines, very soft and melodious, but I'm tripped up on the last two. I don't see why you inverted line 2 to create line three - I can't figure out what line 3 means. Hacking seems a bit strong for the poem. The rest of the poem has softer consonnents. Maybe "crafting" or "forging" might work better sound-wise. Standard disclaimer - I've a tin ear for poetry, so it's quite possible (likely) that I'm missing subtle nuances. Glad to see another poet join our ranks!