Tanialmeida - nicely done. You quietly put together two aspects of freedom - a break from responsibility and from security - in your poem in a deft manner. They're presented as different aspects that can sometimes compliment, and sometimes oppose each other. You have a delicate touch in your poetry, putting in emotions without hitting the reader over the head with them. Living on the border, myself, I can see these thoughts echoed by immigrants. meico - you put together words in very deft ways. Although you use clinical terms like retinal codes and cortical screens, the poem stays soft and lyrcial. You do an excellent job controlling the tone and mood of you poem while using unexpected words and phrases.