Forum: Writers


Subject: Step Away from the Monitor

Crescent opened this issue on Feb 23, 2003 ยท 9 posts


jgeorge posted Thu, 27 February 2003 at 5:36 AM

I like this very much, great combination of image and words... I usually don't comment on pieces here, I find difficult to say anything on pieces that aren't written in my language, moreover I'm not a poet (not even in Italian)... Of course I have my tastes and I like something more than some other... This poem, in combination with the image, I like particularly, and this is the reason I venture to give my opinion... I find a little out of place the 4th stanza... In the first the two medium are put tigether, the second is dedicated to the paper, the third to the pixels... if the couplet arrived just then, not prepared by the sense something missing in the previous one... it would be of greater impact, and simply perfect! (at least for my personal taste)