The sales pitch vs. the reality. Made sense to me. I read it aloud two or three times and stumbled at "It's later.. I disappoint you?" and at "A business transaction, No more, maybe less." I'm no poet, but to me the meter seems off at these two places. I think something like It's latter now, and I disappoint you," or similar might work better. Not sure how I'd work up the transaction part. Prostitution is not one of the professions I admire, but I think you paint with an overly broad brush, tjames. I actually know a former prostitute, and I can't think of a less hateful woman. There are a myriad of reasons people (not all prostitutes are women) fall into prostitution. And it is certainly a topic oft visited both in prose and poetry. jon

 
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