Alex: Be warned, tjames can be blunt, and sometimes you have to read between the lines a few times to figure out what he is saying. If I am reading Star Light the way he is, it feels choppy, rather than flowing with the finesse he refers to. It seems like most lines are sentences, coming to an abrupt halt each time. Those that aren't full end stops still break with a comma, a pause, that adds to that blocky, hard feel. Even the words tend to be short, with only a few polysyllables. It doesn't contribute to a rhythmic read. Does that help any? Hopefully I'm thinking of some of the same things as tj. BTW, I really like the unexpected twist at "Who ever said that silence was golden? It's naked and ugly, anything but golden."