Forum: Writers


Subject: A Poem and a bit of a Story

The_Aftermath opened this issue on Mar 29, 2003 ยท 8 posts


Shoshanna posted Sun, 30 March 2003 at 5:56 PM

Well, I've got to say, if that is your away message, it's a lot more charming than mine :-) Your poem confused me a bit, mostly it was the line about your mind waking up. It seemed a bit out of place. If you have been in the company of someone you don't want to leave surely you'd have been paying attention? I really liked the line about it only being good bye if it's not a good night :-) Your story is a bit short for my taste (that's a hint to post more!) but it seems like a good start. Shanna :-)