Thank you very much Crescent :-) I know my punctuation is awful. I just don't know how to correctly punctuate things. re Story 1 Well, I got one bit right. I wanted you to think she might have a slightly more adult obsession :-) She was meant to be talking to her husband re being away working, so I definitely got that bit wrong. re Story 2 It's a kids story. I make them up when I babysit. For some reason, kids seem to find the idea of men sneaking off to the pub completely hilarious. Almost as funny as toilet humour. re Story 3 I was afraid I'd overdone it, I was trying to get around the no words rule I'd set myself. I actually went back over it after I'd finished it and deliberately went through trying to add colours, sounds and scents just to fill it up a bit :-) I'm hoping some kind soul here would consider copying and pasting one of my entries and correctly punctuating it. I'd really welcome the chance to see how it ought to be done. Somehow, when I try and read the rules in a grammar book I just don't see how I apply them to the things I write. The other thing that gets me every time is when you write conversation, where do you start the sentence? Should it be on a new line every time, or just squashed into the story like the rest of the words? Shanna :-)