Forum: Writers


Subject: April is National Poetry Month

Crescent opened this issue on Apr 01, 2003 ยท 19 posts


Shoshanna posted Thu, 03 April 2003 at 7:28 PM

Hi Yomah I'd change the first line if I were you. Either A cold hand splinters... or Cold hands splinter... And I'd try and replace the "beast with two backs" bit as well, although I can't think of anything off the top of my head. Apart from that, I liked it Shanna :-) just my personal opinion.