SamTherapy opened this issue on Apr 04, 2003 ยท 10 posts
mysteri posted Sat, 05 April 2003 at 2:24 PM
I like it! Your choices of words and expressions definitely fit the selective mind-wipe you explained. I almost wish you had presented the poem first and the explanation after. The rhythm feels a little irregular to me in the first stanzas of the "Mindkiller," whereas it is much more insistent in "Josephine."