I was very pleased to see that someone had created a film longer than 5 minutes ;) And it's quite good for your first effort. The story flows well, and there are only a few spots where the action stalls (the scene where the robot is banging his head against the wall being one) For your next film, you might consider adding a bit more camera movement to liven up your otherwise static shots. I'm not talking about wild 'orbit around the whole set at 50 miles an hour' camera movement, Just have the camera zoom in like 3-4 % over the duration of a shot. It'll add that extra bit of livelyness and will keep the viewer more interested in the film. Also watch your ease-in and out for camera movements, it is bad cinematography to pan the camera (ie to follow someone walking) and then instantaneously stop the camera movement while the action continues.