The problem is not that the words aren't descriptive, but they are shoved in heavily and break the flow of the dialogue. The point of the scene is lost in all the unnecessary details. Saying something has a "Chitum and Hau logo" is not descriptive for me because I don't know what such a logo looks like. Actually, I think I've read a novel that this scene could have been lifted from. Maybe Crescent would be a best seller if she didn't write so well most of the time. !