My personal and unprofessional opinion; I like the original better. The color is excellent, skin tones the shirt the hair all make for a nice realistic shot and the light makes a perfect oval frame around the face. The extra darkness on the outside edge of the picture helps the look of sadness and focuses the viewer to the desired point on the photo. I think you have a very nice shot in the original, you may play with it but I don't see how you can improve it. But, do experiment and have fun.