Ok, made some punctuation changes, and removed L13 as I could find no real way to tie it with any other line and of course the mind went numb when trying to think of a line to tie it to. I think it reads a bit more easily now. Again, thanks to everyone who posted a comment and/or suggestion. It truly helps to have someone outside of the writing to proof it and offer suggestions as I know that I become to close to what I have written and cannot see the errors. ~~ Depression burns like acid rain dripping..... dripping.... dripping off the tar paper roof to gather in oily puddles in hollows worn by the tired steps of generations of those who passed her by time and again. A door hangs askew from its rusted hinges. Broken windows stare out blindly into darkness punctuated with sirens and flashing light. Bare walls, stained from too many years of neglect tell tales unheard by human ears, of lives lived, loves lost and of birth and death. Will no one recognize the beauty she once was? Perhaps some society, historical or otherwise, will one day restore the piteous empty shell, or some distant future wrecking ball remove the final remnants of her presence, to make room for condos for those who are worthy.