It does flow much better now. I really like it. It brings back memories of an old mansion we broke into when I was a kid - an old abandoned house, rumored to be haunted. It was a grand and glorious old house, so sad in its state of neglect and decay. Sadly, no historical society saved it, it was torn down to make way for a small subdivision. But all those houses are just pretenders in her place. jon

 
~jon
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