Welcome nick, glad you decided to join us. Your poem is really beautiful. I can't find any technical points that I would pick on myself. I don't give to picking apart sentiment with intellect, I find your line breaks make for a very soft easy read which I think is befitting of the poem itself. Again welcome, and I look forward to reading more of you. Hope your recent discovery of R'osity is as good as my own has been.

"Every line means something."
Jean Michel Basquiat