I think that most of the issues are in the lighting .... right now her face is shadowed, which means that the brightest and therefor most interesting thing in the image is the guys neck and that image on the wall over there. SOmehow I don't think thats what you had in mind .... The lighting as it lies on the bkg is fine, very dramtic with nice lights and darks. I think that if you put a couple dim lights above and behind the camera you can bring this image out a little better. You might want to experiment wih a light right in front of her face, but that could be tricky.