Nice stuff. I like the abrupt nature of each phrase - you've done it really well. Am I stepping on toes by giving some constructive criticism? I hope not...sorry if I am. You might want to run through it to smooth a few things which just sound a bit out of place. You capture the darkness, and urgency with skill, but in a few spots (like the introduction of a needle-gun - maybe a more ambiguous reference to it might fit in better; and perhaps 'nestled' rather than snuggling?). The questions in there work DAMN well - especially that comfort or curse thing. Finally, you might even want to add the cliche 'no rest for the wicked' after 'keep moving' at the start?!?!?!?! - or would that detract from it? All just my opinions though. :) Great work!