Looks better than my first. Do need to fix the eyes,uncross them a bit, say move them outside between 3 to 7, and close the eyelids a bit. If you have a paint program for post, try to round the shoulders, push, smudge, clone, what ever it takes. Something I notice first off and find it distracting. You can render as big as you want, the bigger the better, for doing post work, then size down when your finished. Also save your render as a Tiff or PSD file. It saves as an Alfa channel, so you can use layers without toasting the original. You do have the basics down. Nice work.