wow - I didn't have my two male characters in the same scene, but I like your version, too! (Have you tried to get a play on Broadway?) I have no great ambitions, other than to get it written to my satisfaction. My original idea was for a graphic novel ... I soon realized that I couldn't do sufficient illustrating to justify the title and still include all the written words. I did one quick synopsis and version, which I misplaced for weeks. Then, I did a total rewrite - more words... somehow, it lost it's punch, imo. Now, I'm trying to find a happy medium... and the right format. I really don't have a problem with trying to write it both as a novel and a play simultaneously. What I have a problem with is writing them separately, it seems. I always said that writing a novel was beyond me - this is my first attempt. Working against me is that I spent years writing free-form poetry. I tend to revert to this, despite my intention not to do so. (Though, I did think that I would intersperse the novel with poems.) I think I could work this into play format as well. By the way, www.playwriting101.com had some very good information - thanks!