Here's the links to the stories: Borderline 1 http://www.renderosity.com/viewed.ez?galleryid=473358 Borderline 2 http://www.renderosity.com/viewed.ez?galleryid=473920 To me, Borderline 1 isn't that unreadable, just slightly annoying with the strange line breaks. I'll go through them tonight for critiquing. Cheers!