It's looking good. I've been wanting to do a graphic story for ages but haven't got up the courage to start yet. Your lettering positioning is good and I think the style of the frames and composition is very fitting for an opening scene. Maybe in the first scene, instead of the house being on grass, put it on concrete instead? Grass is very very hard to get right in Poser because you need a high polycount for realism, which is not feasible on your machine. The darker grass on the left rear looks fine, it's just the stuff closer up which spoils the effect. Good luck with it, I will be looking forward to seeing more!

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and strange and beautiful
something not everyone knows how to love." - Warsan Shire