Ornlu, please try not to take my comments as criticism of your writing in general. I never called you a horrible writer; I addressed only their editing of the lines you mentioned in my first post, and in my second post I stated that they should have given you galley proofs to review, especially if they changed your article so much that they changed the meaning of many lines. When I edit other people's writing, I go beyond grammar, spelling, and punctuation ONLY when I feel that the writer didn't make him or herself clear enough. This is why I assumed whoever edited your work was the same way; I had no idea to what extent they made the changes as I only had your first and second posts on which to make any judgments. Had I known how severely they rewrote your entire article (your later examples are a much better illustration of your original complaint than your first example), then I would have seen your point right away. As it was, I was only trying to give the editor the benefit of the doubt, especially considering how well they DID edit that first bit. I still say you should have gotten galley proofs so that you could correct their corrections. I used to work in magazine publishing, and I thought galley proofs were the standard procedure. I guess Renderosity Magazine is still doing things in a fairly amateur way.