Forum: Writers


Subject: The Farm That cried

mavros opened this issue on Apr 09, 2004 ยท 6 posts


airlynx posted Thu, 22 April 2004 at 10:47 AM

I like the story, however, it is riddled with grammatical and spelling errors. Also the cliche "leaks like a seive" could be replaced. It didn't seem in character with the house to use cliches. The story is very nice however, and conveys a lot of mood. It is deserving of some proofreading.