TheAlex opened this issue on May 03, 2004 ยท 4 posts
manimal posted Mon, 03 May 2004 at 8:56 PM
I think you write great descriptive sentences and I'm going to learn from them. I also found your interpretation of the picture to be creative. The style seems to fit more of a novel than an ultra short story. I would have liked it better if two of the big paragraphs were shorter and the story moved quicker without losing any of your good emotional buildup.