I'm afraid this looks like a step backwards from the scene you first posted. I'd have a serious look at GroinGrinder's work @ p7.
I don't think you actually need to show the rocks themselves, the fire trail/comet-tail would be better at these distances. 0.02p

Message edited on: 08/12/2004 08:00

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