Firstly, thank you Gurami for your very insightful thoughts. It gave me ideas that I had not thought of pursuing. Your first paragraph though said it was too short.

The idea was to fit as much information into a 500-1000 word short short story and I followed what was on the other web sites as to how the other authors delivered their message in a short space of time.

(Please read my point in entry 3 above about links to short short story websites and perhaps you could come up with one of your own. I would love to see your effort, with your ideas I feel it would be very good)

It was only meant to be a short straight to the point piece of prose to see what you could do with a minimal word count. Although the rest of your narrative was actually quite helpful so that when I'm ready to deliver something of length, I will definitely consider some of your points as they were well worth following up. Your comments were most appreciated.
Regards
shemia