Matthias Most of the notes that you pointed are to me, so that I could keep my thoughts as I went on. What's posted is the Alpha v0.0.0.0.1 version heh. Many thanks for the comments. I really do appreciate it. The links are appreciated too. I didnt want to post all of the last revision of that scene, much less the rest of the story. I know it's brutal, hard to follow and not in the exact format. I'm picking up Movie Magic Screenwriter probably this weekend. If I'm going to do this, I've got to do it right. Again, thank you for your feed back. I greatly appreciate it. Allen