It's a wonderfull idea, I'd like to read the rest of it sometime... Apart from the spelling and punctuation, which you obviously know about, you need to re-read the story and consider using a word or something other than and in a few places... eg, try- And in this segment-

Gods need mortals to believe in them or they die, if gods die are they not mortal, and if they are mortal...why then do we call them gods??.