Actually the shutter speed is fine.... I like the movement of the hand and exposure is good. The final image is good! The third image in BW has wonderful tones.... All that being said, I think there are a couple of things that could have been done in camera which would save you lots of time in postwork though. You didn't say which settings you used. So basically I'm just guessing here, judging what I see. :~) Get in closer, by either physically moving in or zooming in with the lens... there is a lot of distractions in the background, too much space above his head, and not enough below. His foot got chopped off for example. The building being in such great focus, makes me think that you used a fairly small aperture. Try opening that aperture way up to blur up the background, that would help too.... I think had the background been sufficiently less distracting all of the postwork could have essentially been avoided all together. Then you could desaturate and do whatever artistic/fun things you wanted to do. Just my 2 cents And merely meant to help....

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