Some comments: The black on his cheeks should come over the top of the bill, too, judging from those photos. The darkness of his wingtops where they join the body should perhaps rise up on the back of his neck into what seems to be a point, and maybe be a bit fuzzy in blending... yours appears to break off evenly and suddenly, but it is hard to tell with just one POV. Overall, he looks good. I like that red beak and the wing patterns. :) You've been doing a good job about educating us on various finches, too! Carolly