The good: It doesn't look like Dan Farr. The not-so-good: Judging by the middle render, there's something seriously wrong with the skull. Cheekbones are far too sunken, and the face appears to be sloping inward towards the bottom -- try to sketch the underlying skull and you'll see what I mean -- and it looks (could be wrong) like the lips are protruding in an exaggerated way to compensate. Remember, the mouth is a circular strip of muscle held relatively flat against the skull until you actually purse your lips. A jaw set that far back into the throat wouldn't be that wide or square. Draw it back out, perhaps?