dido6 opened this issue on Sep 06, 2005 ยท 28 posts
garblesnix posted Wed, 07 September 2005 at 4:55 PM
I'll be the first.
dido6:
I like your description of the Commenting Thread.
It is to-the-point, full of useful information, and visually pleasing.
However, I'm afraid I found it lacking in character developement and dramatic tension. I don't feel that I know this Midrael and this dido6 as real people. I see their existence as just words on paper, not flesh and blood, hair and bone, credit cards and pizza cravings. I'd like to know their hair color, what kind of birds they like, and have they ever eaten squid with mustard.
Secondly, and I say this with love, they seem to agree on everything. Perhaps if you have them occasionally disagree on something, for example inappropriate adverbs, it will create tension, which in turn will compel the reader to want more. An event culminating in some kind of duel would be golden.
And finally, the fact you are going to open up the forum to comments from any Tom, Dick, and garblesnix frankly (adv.) frightens me. Writers need discipline, that is to say, someone to rein them in, that is to say, someone to focus them so they don't start writing odd things about squids and duels.
(On a serious note, glad you're back)
Garblefull-of-himselfsnix