Forum: Writers


Subject: Starting a Story

Moebius87 opened this issue on Nov 27, 2005 ยท 22 posts


jstro posted Sun, 27 November 2005 at 10:44 PM

There is quite a bit of back story peeking through here, which bodes well for a deep and interesting tale. As to where to take it, it's a mighty short segment for us to come up with ideas. Obviously, there is a reason he disappeared, and presumably, a reason for him to resurface. Some noble cause, perhaps? No idea how much you've already got worked out in you head, but with all those back story hints, I'm betting you've got a notion. I like your style a lot, and love the linguistic twists that lead to his alias. My only quibble is with the last sentence. With the "That was how..." it sounds disconnected from the tale. Maybe something like "Thus, the great bounty..." would flow better? jon

 
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