This is quite well done! I thought you did a nice job on the dialog/script. You created characters with distinct personalities and began laying out their history - a great start to the arc of the story. Your captain portrayed emotion through her facial expressions and your Vulcan was appropriately emotionless. Your wife did an excellent job of characterizing two unique voices - that helps alot. I will make only one suggestion: At the end, about 2/3 of the way through, the Vulcan bends over to look into the thing-a-ma-bob. You've bent her strictly at the hips - her body remains straight. If you're going for perfection, you might start the bend with her head - just a tiny movement forward - then her chest and so forth down her torso. You could also just start the bend with her abdomen and then follow that with her hips bending. I'm not standing in front of a mirror so I'm not sure exactly which order to recommend but the point is that the bend seems a lttle too stiff. You might also move her hips backwards a little as she bends. It looks like her center of gravity is forward of her feet, which would cause her to fall forward instead of stand. Or move one foot forward a bit to compensate for the center of gravity shift. This is being quite nit-picky, I know, but it would bring it one step closer to perfection, IHMO. It looks like it's going to be an interesting finished product. I hope the rest of your production goes smoothly - I'm quite interested to see how this turns out.

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