Dialyn,

You are right again! The Horse “Phhhwwwwwwpth!” was a total bomb. I sent a first draft of the novel to my copy editor, and she called me late last week, laughing hysterically. Seems she did not get that it was a horse making the noise.

She read the “Phhhwwwwwwpth!” sound, which was followed by a wet stickiness on the man’s face. It just did not work, on so many levels!

However, it was fun to share a great snorting laughter. Needless to say, I have rewritten that section. Thanks again for your excellent advice :]

Dee-Marie