Glad to see someone's picking up the gauntlet. Way to go Hanevi and Cyba_Storm. Both of these conjure very vivid images.

As to the proper form, well I guess I went off half cocked. Nothing new there. I looked up cinquain on Wikipedia and got a little more detailed explanation. Seems it's syllables, not words that make a true cinquain – sort of like morae in haiku.

From Wikipedia, “...a short, unrhymed poem of twenty-two syllables, five lines of 2, 4, 6, 8, 2 syllables respectively.” Neither of even come close to those criteria. I'll have to give it another go. So for this challenge, do it either way – words or syllables, but yes, it seems the last line should be two (of whichever).

Here's another try, this time using syllables of 2-4-6-8-2.

Spirits.

Thoughts of those gone

Haunt me by day and night.

I beg you, just leave me alone.

Bourbon.

~jon

 
~jon
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