Tim,

I loved this and am looking forward to future episodes!  In particular, I'd like to comment on a few things that stand out for me...

• Story, story, story... great job!  It seems to me that the time you spent writing the story and all the story-boarding paid off in spades.  You kept me interested throughout and anxious for more.

• Audio... again, excellent job!  In particular, Kudo's to your wife for her talent not only in the voice-overs but the singing parts.  I love the theme/title song written for this, as well as the execution of it and placements/timing within the clip.  It really contributes to the overall ambience/mood.  You also did an excellent job with the background sfx, which peolpe take for granted - ship engine hum, singing inside a bubble, with breathing apperatis (sp) dispersion sounds, voice-over-comm-link, etc all combined to great effect.

• Expression/emotion... very nice work on the facial expressions used to convey the emotion of the scene(s).  I particularly liked the scene with Kara after opening the ship air-lock, reading the gauge and trying to look back over her shoulder (within the confines of the EVA suit) with uncertainty...

...there are some things I could critique you on (relatively stiff body movements, etc), but the combination of Story/Pacing/Audio/Expression all carry this work above the bar.

Congrats.

Keith

 

 

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