The models and texturing and lighting are top notch.  I agree that the English title work needs some help, but it's good enough that you can still follow the story. 

The creature at the end has a little bit of a "floaty foot" problem.  I don't know if it's because he is supposed to be jumping in slo-mo or what, but he/she doesn't appear to be quite glued to the ground.

Next time, Allibaba, give us a preview before you add the full text.  I'm sure we'll give you all the English grammar and spelling tips you would  ever need or want.  That's a fine effort and well worth the time you put into it.

Could be worse, could be raining.