(The 1st image is the original so you can easily compare.)

The only thing I didn't do was adjust the perspective/focal on the camera.  I've shrank these images down from 1024 x 768 to 640 x 480.  At 1024 x 768 I actually like the depth of field at 25mm for the focal.

1. I added more foliage.
2. For the lighting I turned off a few shadows and doubled the ambient occlusion.  I also turned down the intensity on the mirror lights.
3. Added the lamp texture.
4. Toned down the dresser's highlights.
5. Offset the camera slightly.
6. Adjusted the skin texture for more realism.
7. I tried a new carpet with the correct scale and I also tried a wooden floor. I'll probably stick with the wooden floor.  I also scaled down the wall texture.
8. I tried to show the left hand gesture more and in the mirror in the far back.
9. I changed the color on the underwear and top.
10. I tried to make them look more like an apartment than an office.

Be brutally honest again please.  I'm thinking about changing the wall texture, and of course I'll fix the light bulb in postwork and remove it.

Also AntoniaTigermentioned the wall color pattern looks wrong.  I actually did that on purpose to give it some flavor but if it looks bad I'll change it.

One last question.  Because of my limitation with time. If I present these images to someone who paid me for them, do you think it would be satisfactory? The people I'm working for have no concept of art or anything. They are just the average joe you know?  Do you think it could work commercially?   Please be honest!

ORIGINAL

CARPET, LIGHT CYAN GLOW

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WOODEN FLOOR, LIGHT TAN WALLS**