It's pretty good, but I can't get a real feel for Miriam's character.  She's been through hell, but how does she react to other people? The only thing I could pick up on was she was a bitter survivor who was a real loner who never really knew love.  If the novel's main push is a humanizing of an 'outsider' character, it'll work pretty damned well,IMO.

Anyway--I'm still trying to absorb all the information.  You really crammed a huge amount into just 14 pages! Whoosh! I'm stymied where to start a pic at not knowing what the main antagonist is going to be, or what parts all the various alien species are going to do in the novel. One image stands out from all the others, where her life changed at the meeting of the previous wearer.

It's well done, and I have an image in mind. I'll post when It's ready to eye-ball.

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