Thanks for all of this, its really helpful. I have some minor grammar issues, but I'm also an English teacher, so grammar is not the issue. My problem is mostly style. The editor told me I need to work my descriptions into my narrative better so as not to break the reader's suspension of disbelief. My descriptions are like stand alone clauses.

Also there are a number of awkward phrasings that I'm having a great deal of trouble with. So, as you say, bad transitions and clumsy descriptions are my issues.

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