Miranda,

From what I see here, the 1st shot  of the (punk kid)  there is a yellowish (tungsten?) light on the left  competing with your main (white) light. Its rather harsh on the models head in my opinion.

I  think it would help to show the image BEFORE you tone mapped it.  Also sharing the EXIF data (camera settings) used would give us some additional information to reference and help with feedback. You can view Exif date within Photoshop using the FILE menu then selecting FILE INFO.

Joe