its an improvement on the first.

it still seems to be a wee bit glowy and low-contrast - it may be your gamma settings or lighting. or a complete lack of hair highlights?

 

http://shortlonghairstyles.com/images/2009/06/Mila-Kunis-hairstyle-for-round-face1.jpg

http://0.tqn.com/d/beauty/1/0/Z/p/82169515.jpg

http://s.tidebuy.com/images/product/1/1714/1714992_1.jpg

http://0.tqn.com/d/beauty/1/0/t/x/Leighton_Meester.jpg

 

i would possibly suggest starting with a brunette base, and once you have that looking right then modify it into a redhead. getting a proper redhead look is tricky and might be easier once you have all the other variables worked out.