Wolfenshire opened this issue on Oct 20, 2013 · 4 posts
Wolfenshire posted Sun, 20 October 2013 at 6:33 PM Site Admin
That makes the most sense I’ve read so far. I think what you are saying is that it depends on who is speaking.
[Right] The Drill Sergeant marched up and down the ranks. “Line it up, you maggots,” barked the Drill Sergeant.
[Wrong] The Lord of the Castle stood on the parapets surveying the battle. “Stand fast men,” barked Lord Richard.
Lord Richard would be commanding his men in a clear and concise manner, not barking at them like a dog. (woof woof)
[Right] The Lord of the Castle stood on the parapets surveying the battle. “Stand fast men,” commanded Lord Richard.
As for Voice and Style, I just ordered 'Voice & Style (Elements of Fiction Writing)' by Johnny Payne from Amazon. I’ll wait until that arrives and I read it to post a thread and comment on Voice. Thanks for the suggestion.
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