I haven't looked through all the pages, so this is just an initial feedback thing.

I think you would be better off organizing your frames as a normal comic book. A good suggestion are the books by Will Eisner called Comics and Sequential arts. Amazon and Story telling and visual narrative also by Will Eisner - Amazon

Both of these are very good at explaining how to design comics, storytelling, framing, using light and shadows and expressions in comic art, so highly recommend those.

The reason why i think it would be a good idea, is because when a lot of things aint happening on each page, it quickly gets annoying switching between pages so you kind of loose track of things.

I also think your images could use a bit more diversity and depth or they will quickly appear a bit flat. So maybe get some shadows in there, different textures etc. Lighting can really help with doing this. For instant you can place items outside the view of the camera which only purpose is to cast interesting shadows etc.

Using the camera in varies ways can also create some very interesting views. For instant it seems like you frame all or try to frame figures as a whole, meaning you see them in full figure from head to toe. However since you are making a comic, you don't need to show everything because its a story, so one image is carried to the next. What i mean is, for instant one image a soldier might be shooting his weapons at someone, and you see this person in full figure, so the next image can easily be a close up of his expression for instant, because the reader already know what this soldier is doing from the last frame, so they carry the story with them from one frame to another.

Last thing i would do is to change the font type its a bit "robotic" or what to say. My suggestion is to go to dafont.com, they have a huge amount of free and very good comic ,cartoon and handwritten fonts you can use for free.

Anyway as i said haven't looked through all pages, so its just my initial impression and know its a lot of work making a whole comic.