Very very nice! I cannot wait to read the story. Now Now!!! IMHO All these comix (we gotta come up with a better descriptor) are likely to be the main way any of us are going to see any returns on our investments (emotional, financial, etc) Maybe we need a comics (#@!$ innacurate descriptor) forum??? Ok, my (toughluv) crit -->I missed the whole coming out of the vortex thing. I like the idea of incorporating the bg images into it -->I would bend the chest forward a bit more to accentuate the feeling of forward motion. Giving the impression of motion is really tough in P4 without resorting to blurs or motion lines. Anyone else notice that? --> Doing that you would have to tilt the head back to keep that head jaunt that I absolutely love. -->I might take the L&R shoulders and reverse them. When you step forward with your left (as she is) your right arm and shoulder move forward. Even if she is being projected out and her arms are supposed to be behind her, I'd bend her so that the upper right of her body is the leading edge.