So, the way I read it is that you write your own version of the open source license, and the open source website reviews it to confirm that it is legal and proper. In that case, I think the most effective thing to do is to create your particular license, have it "officialised", the submit a copy to JennyK (jhandley@bondware.com) along with your intentions. Then she can read it, and tell you if anything needs covered, or if it is usable as-is.